Monday, 9 September 2013
BOY By Roald Dahl
These QUICK writes by Room 3 are inspired by the Biography called BOY by Roald Dahl.
When Roald Dahl and his friends were school boys they had a favourite sweet shop and one day decided to play a prank on the sweet shop owner Mrs Pratchett.
Room 3 had to imagine they were in the group of friends and had to describe what they HEARD, SAW, FELT and WONDERED.
Read these fun pieces of writing and see if they meet the criteria...do they include these words (heard, felt, saw and wondered) and have they painted a picture with words, hooking you into the scene?
I heard Mrs Pratchett open the jar of sherbet suckers…as she twisted the squeaky jar full of suckers for the customers waiting in line. As my friend and I came into the shop I went a bit closer towards the crunchy gobstoppers. I heard my friend ask Mrs Pratchett for a sucker. I heard her feet walk across the crumbly, sugary floor and slowly open the squeaky jar. I loved the look of the green glittery gobstoppers. I saw Mrs Pratchett about to pick a crunchy sugary sherbet sucker…I dropped the dead grey mouse into the gobstopper jar. I felt the squishy ugly mouse fall into the jar. I wondered, just wondered how frightened Mrs Pratchett would be when she saw the ugly dead mouse in the jar!
I heard my friend ordering his lollies, then Mrs Pratchett slowly twisting open the jar of sherbet suckers, ‘plonk’ into the paper bag they went. “…and one bootlace please..” asked my friend. Now was my chance! I opened the jar of gobstoppers silently…I saw Mrs Pratchett put her greasy, brown fingers in the jar of bootlaces… I quickly dropped the dead mouse into the jar of gobstoppers. I felt my heart thumping! I felt like I was going to explode! As we ran out of the sweet shop I wondered when she would find out about the mouse and if she would know it was me!
I crept into the sweet shop, and snuck behind the counter. As I began to open the lid of the gobstoppers my brother yelled out “I want a sherbet sucker please?!” I heard Mrs Pratchett twisting open the lid and plop the sucker into a paper bag. All the sugar was crumbling into the bag. I saw my brothers face was glowing red “Now get out of my shop!” Mrs Pratchet shouted to my friends “Because only one of you is buying!”. As she handed over the bag I dropped the mouse into the gobstoppers. I left the shop quickly with my friends. I felt my heart pumping faster like it was going to explode. I wondered what would happen next…..